Saturday, April 9, 2011

The Silent Predilection



Here goes the story:


His dull black button-like eyes would constantly stare at her legs, both in affection and jealousy.


He had hirsute limbs while her limbs were soft and smooth, without a single hair. Over the past two years, he had seen her almost every day and became a consummate lover of her eternal beauty. She was as white as snow and walked swiftly. He would secretly stare at her till the time she had embarked the bus.

He would wait for hours and hours ,would stay restless all throughout the night. In the morning, everything came to a halt, when she arrived at the bus stop and sat on the bench, he would affectionately stare at her legs without getting noticed. He loved curves of her calves and her feet covered in artistic sandals, seemed too tempting to him.
He sat below her bench and out of the limbs of all the people who used sit on the bench during day; he would distinctly identify her lovely legs and admire them in affection. At times, she wore  pants to work and this brought a great deal of disappointment for him. At those instances, he missed her legs and looked hard to peep through her pants. Such was his life, full of affection and lovely feelings, tinged with disappointment.

One day his world came to an end. A huge brown canine came and sat just next to the bench. When the dog discovered him, he took him out with his large paw and started playing with him. As the dog ran away while he hung from the giant's jaw. All other stray dogs joined the game and the teddy was torn apart into pieces.
His life was brought to an end and so was his love..

And such was the story of an abandoned teddy who secretly fell in love a beautiful and pretty girl.




Motivatin Behind the Write-up:
There was a time when I gifted a 2.5-feet tall teddy to my girlfriend. Few days back, when my relationship was going through hard times and I was afraid of breaking up, I thought about what kinda feelings I will have post break-up and happened to give a thought about how abandoned that teddy would feel after our break-up. So I searched for pics of some abandoned teddies, this what I am habitual of  ;) ;)  Eventually I stumbled upon the pic attached here. Soon I built up this story after interpreting the said photograph







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53 comments:

Binu Thomas said...

Nice post buddy.. Very well written :)

SUB said...

nice one....feel sorry for the Teddy...

Tinker Tank said...

@ Binu: Thanx for appreciating :)

Tinker Tank said...

@Sub: yeah.. sympathy is supposed to be aligned with the teddy.. Thank you!

Amropali said...

awwwww...
I love the refreshingly new protagonist.
:D

Tinker Tank said...

@ Amropali: hope this time, he doesnt get torn by canines :D

Mitostargazer said...

this just shows how screwed up you are....searching "abandoned teddy" on google :P

Tinker Tank said...

@mito: yaar wo feel karna tha..so that my usual way of feeling somethng :P

Animesh Ganguly said...

A nice post indeed, the picture explains the post really well and so do you :)

Tinker Tank said...

@Animesh: thanx buddy..n i guess we have few frnds in common..check out ur fb profile ;) :D

Arti said...

I was caught sympathizing with the teddy at the end of the post, that just shows how beautiful the write-up is! Great work :)

Tinker Tank said...

@Arti: My Professor of Indian Literature once said for a story "This has been narrated in a way that leaves sympathy towards XYZ character in the readers mind."
I just tried to experiment with that concept while writing this. I am glad to see read your comment. Thank you

Varsha said...

Poor teddy, but a very well written story!

Hope things are better on the relationship front for you

Tinker Tank said...

@Varsha: someone said "every relationship has its baggage."
Things appear to be fine amongst both of us. Thanks for your concern and appreciation.

Sanjana said...

That's a lovely one dude ;)

Tinker Tank said...

@Sanjana: Thanks buddy :)

some unspoken words said...

awww feeling sad for teddy. thats written very nice.

Tinker Tank said...

@some_unspoken_words: Thank You :)

Mitostargazer said...

Deeply written. You have the gift to look deep inside the texture of a given situation, diving into the various emotions involved with different characters. No words to commend your effort :)

Next time i would suggest picking up a more subtle and deep situation. That would do justice with your talents :)

Tinker Tank said...

@mito: Thanx for appreciating..I will try to pick up more fine topics and would work them into a even better write-up.. Thanx buddy :)

coolpul said...

gr8 imagination... never saw this coming from you :)

Tinker Tank said...

@Pulkit: Thanx buddy :)

Rajlakshmi said...

thats a very diffrent story :)
well narrated.

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Rajlakshmi: Thank You :)

GvSparx said...

This is the most bemusing article I ever read on a blog.

shikha sourav said...

lovely:)

shikha sourav said...

lovely:)

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@GvSparx: Thanx buddy..but the word "bemusing" is itself so confusing..it has varied meanings.. but anyways thanks for reading it :)

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Shikha: I am glad that you liked it :)

Jaai Vipra said...

Pants, not a pant.

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

Thanks for bringing it to my notice

Mitostargazer said...

dude! you are getting better and fiercer with each post. I'll have to watch out for ya ;)
kudos

Ashwathy said...

came here from BlogAdda.com...
very nicely written... :-) wouldnt have guessed the ending at all!

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Ashwathy: Thank You :)

... Madhumathi ... said...

Oh wow, such a beautiful story! Unexpected ending :D teddy's idea is very good :) nd I loved this story! :)

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Madhumathi: Thanx :)

Ausdrucklos said...

that was beautiful.
A different perspective.
loved it :D

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@AUsdrucklos: Thanks buddy :)

Tulika Verma said...

Haha...lovely :)

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Tulika: Thank You!

Nequesta said...

A very novel story built around a single photograph :)

Tasneem M Yusuf Mandsaurwala said...

I feel sad for teddy and his silent love.
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Saptadeep said...

An excellent work.....d love is almost evrywhere strewn dre.....jus loved d way u captured dose silent feelings n gave dem ur words.....carry it on bro....

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

^ Thank You all.. :)

Sunil Pratap Singh said...

Silently saying alot of words..

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

@Sunil: Thanx :)

Priyadha Pradeep said...

hearttouchin story,...nice work

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

^Thank You!

Payoj said...

Awesome perspective :D

Surbhi Bafna said...

a very neatly woven story with an inanimate animated with the pure love. Cheers!!! :)

Aditya Prakash Garg said...

Thanx Surbhi. What you mentioned, in your comment, is exactly what I aimed at while writing this!

wordsofswati said...

very intance love...nicely writen...:)

Abhinav Gupta said...

sweetly written... heart touching!